Tuesday 4 June 2013

Learning to Structure our Recount

One very sunny morning, a bright one too, I went to my dad’s in the afternoon. It was for  6 day’s. On the first day, Kelly told me next time I came here it will be my little brother Jayden’s birthday. The next thing I did was read a story to my little sister, half way. My little sister fell sleep which was very unusual. On the 5th day my dad ad kelly organised to go hose riding. So we got in the car and headed dawn the road...When we got to the barn no one was there was there, so we went to there house. No one was there either, so we  went back to the barn and waited. Finally someone came, so we went to wake up my little sister.Then we went to see the horses.The one I rode was the naughty one. 2 hours later, when we got to the rodeo (the rodeo is a place where  people ride hoses and bull’s) I got told it was April’s birth day. April got on the hose she was on it  for 2 an a half hours I got on after. I got scared because  I was afraid of him bucking me off  him (buck means a horse picks up it’s back legs when you’re on it). April hopped back on him and Freeway bucked her off. Her dad kicked Freeway. I didn’t go back on Freeway but I did go on the biggest horse called chocolate didn’t buck. Oh yeah I forgot Mr love, he is not broken in yet (he can not be ridden yet). 1 more horse, the most friendly horse of all, Cody, you can stand behind  him and he won’t buck. The next thing we did was go back to the barn. We watched a movie and I said “I’m tired it is time to go home”. I read a story to my little sister Tayla and we watched Charlotte’s Web, Mickey Mouse and then Over the Hedge. We all went to sleep after that. The next day I woke up. I was tired as a sleepy lion and as slow as a sloth. I remembered I was going home. Tayla asked me if I can play the song Taylor Swift We are never ever getting back together again on my iphone. I said “Yes you can”. “Tayla what do you say?” “Please Summer!” “Here you go.” Kelly said “It’s time to change into your kindergarden clothes Tayla.” “No play time.” “Get changed.” “Okay Mummy.” “Five minutes to pack up or you won’t get to see your boyfriend Kaile!” We dropped Tayla at kindergarden. Then we went for a two hour walk but we took one hour because we were very fast. Then I went home. I love going to my Dad’s house!   - SE.

"In writing we have been learning to structure our recounts. We need to have an introduction that says who, what, when and where, a body that has two events, with a little but more detail and a conclusion that has a feeling" - KB.

"SE has done a great job of having all the right things in her recount" - KH.